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How would you translate this?

看到走在前面的女儿隆玉凤不高兴了，走在后面的隆宗药小声地安慰道:

Perhaps:

Looking at his annoyed daughter walking in front of him, Zong Longjiang, walking behind her, comforted her quietly, saying:

But isn’t that a little stupid? If his daughter is walking in front of him, obviously he’s walking behind her, right? How about this:

Looking at his annoyed daughter walking in front of him, Zong Longjiang comforted her quietly, saying:

Better right? But the redundant phrase 走在后面的/walking behind  is in fact in the original. It sounds just as awkward in Chinese too. So what’s a translator to do? Seriously, should I fix things I think are wrong or awkward when I’m writing the translation? Or leave them?